 | Entrance | Main | Wiki | List of forums | The Writings |
2008-06-30 Ash: This really isn't a conflict, it doesn't seem like. More like betrayal. 2008-06-30 bloody kisses: Betrayl is a conflict. Well it CAN be, especially when that's the only person you have left. 2008-07-06 Mister Saint: I see where you were going. There actually is a negotiation here, but it's a very small part of the scene, and happens right at the start. 2008-07-06 bloody kisses: Thank you, but actually they're just friends. And the movie thing would work better I think but, I'm not exactly a producer or director or...whatever the hell the right term is hehe ^.^[bloody kisses]: 558.Contest Entries.June'0
Rating: 0.00 Uploaded by: Created: 2008-06-29 23:39:53Keywords: Two girls, Sarah and Bradley. Sarah’s parents are away, they're planning for the night and Bradley thinks they should have fun.
Sarah
I don’t see how inviting boys over would make the place seem more ‘homey’
Bradley
Oh don’t be such a whore! It’ll be fun, we’re all just going to talk and stuff.
Sarah
Why? What’s the point?
Bradley
Girlie, just ‘cause you haven’t had the best run with guys doesn’t mean I can’t.
Sarah
Oh yeah, ‘girlie’, I’m sorry he attempted rape.
Bradley
Oh don’t even be like that.
Sarah
I just…
Bradley - cuts her off
Just a little bit of beer then, pleeeaaassssee
Sarah
I gu…
Bradley – cuts her off again, squeals
Sarah
Oh Jesus. Can’t we like, do it at the park or something though?
Points behind her, indicating the park behind her house
Bradley
Oh yeah, that seems like fun. I’ll invite Jake. BUT I promise I will not invite … uh … him.
Sarah
Don’t even let him find out.
Later that night, Sarah comes in to fish out a jacket from her room
Sarah – startles, jumps, and screams
Landon
Oh don’t be such a girl. He teased her but his eyes were sincere, in the worst way
Sarah
What are you doing here? Hugs the wall
Landon
I heard there was a little shin-dig; thought you were going to be looking for a new boy, decided there’s no room for that. You know, with all of me you have.
Sarah
You’re sick, mentally, you shouldn’t be here my parents could be coming anytime soon…
Landon – smiled, proud of himself
That’s not what Bradley said.
Sarah – speechless
Landon
See, I see it in your eyes, all you NEED is me.
Sarah
Don’t come near me.
Landon
I’ll touch you when I want – you’re mine.
Sarah
STOP!
Landon
We both know you don’t want that…
After she was sure Landon left Sarah put back on her clothes and went out back to the park.
Sarah – hugging herself
How could you?
Bradley
What? Oh Landon? You needed SOME fun.
Sarah
I can’t believe you…
Bradley
What? He’s nice; maybe you just don’t deserve him.
As a scene, this could work well with some development. I have a pretty hard time believing that a sister would intentionally invite someone, knowing that he'd tried to rape her sister. But that's the nature of a scene; if this were in the whole movie, I'm sure it'd be explained somehow.