[aVorbiss]: 642.Poetry. Thread

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2007-09-13 02:27:46

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A pain not quite felt once inflicted.
No, it is delayed in its deliverance.

A heart in which love has been evicted.
It was false, not like his mind had depicted.

A love which has never existed,
For love by one for one who feels none
Is love not at all, but rather ignorance, now, undone.

A boy with his eyes closed
Has them brutally ripped open,
Revealed now is all that wasn’t certain.

A boy with his ears untouched
By the sound of her sacred voice.
Eventually heard, but not what he was hoping,
Revealed now is all that wasn’t certain.

A boy with his hands so cold
Now at his side as he’s moping.
Holding nothing, they’re hurting
And revealed now is all that wasn’t certain.

A boy with his nose now blunt; was once razor sharp
As it cut through the air, filled with her scent.
It spread itself upon his mind, his memory.
Yet revealed now is all that wasn’t certain.

A boy with his mouth wide open,
No words found to be spoken.
Where is it his charisma’s went?
All useless and that effort spent,
For revealed now is all that wasn’t certain.

2007-09-19 Ash: This is a really good poem. I liked how you went through the senses of smell and of hearing, don't see much of that in poetry. Overall, the poem puts through a depressing mood about love. I take it that was what you were aiming for. I just have one question; is it about being dumped or being cheated on seeing as it could go both ways. Once again, very nice job.

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