[Ash]: 102.NaNo.2010.Prologue

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Prologue: A Ball of Light

What is this? Why am I… Who are you?

He looked up at the bright light in the sky, the crisp blue sky. He stood in the middle of a grassy field and just stared, happily. He didn’t understand why he was happy, so being just created, he supposed he was suppose to be like that. He took another second to stare at the light before something hit him.

My name is Max… well, that’s nice I suppose. Max, I kind of like it. Why thank you… Who are you? I feel so close to you even though you’re so high in the sky. I like your light, it’s very pretty…. I need to harvest.

Max walked over to a small plant and found it fully grown. He quickly began digging at it, his smile still beaming. He felt so happy. He felt like this is what he was supposed to be doing, he was supposed to pull these plants from the ground whenever the light in the sky appeared. Suddenly Max stopped. He turned his head around grimacing and worrying.

Wow, where did it go? It disappeared from my hand. Hey, the light. Where did you go light? I have more to do, come back and see me! Come back!

Max looked up at the sky and saw that his friend had gone. It was saddening to the new creation. His friend had brought the light with him, and when he left, he took it with him. He was hoping his friend would come back. Max didn’t know what to do so he sat down and waited for something else to happen.

He didn’t like the grey clouds enclosing the sky. They made him feel alone. Max brought his knees to his chest and hugged them close. He waited and watched the swirling grey. The clouds shifted like they were heavy at the bottom, scrapping an imaginary floor in the sky. All Max could do was wait for something to happen.

I’ll wait for you to come back, friend. I’ll wait for you to bring back the light.

2010-12-21 Tyr Zalo Hawk: Hmm... interesting so far, but this most certainly doesn't look like the 60-something thousand words you said you wrote <_< Am I being led on here?

I'm curious as to whether the entire novel is written this way, switching back from close 3rd to 1st person for thoughts all the time. It's a little bit confusing to read at first, if you don't mind my saying so.

Also, and really no offense meant by this because I know it's NaNo and so good writing isn't really necessary, but I do hope your sentence structure varies just a little bit more before the end <_< Just saying.

Post moooooooore. I can't read it when it's not heeeerrreeee. =D


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