[Kaimee]: 5.Contest Entries.Until the Fat Lady Sings

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2007-01-28 04:13:32

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[Kaimee]: 5.Contest Entries.5 words

Keywords:

clothing

Genre:

Parody

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Flash fiction

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Free for reading

Until the Fat Lady Sings...

© Kate-Aimee Conrick. All rights reserved!

My stitches hurt. I can feel them straining, pulling, edges fraying. Oh golden pins, I despise her. Every time, it’s those rolls of white doughy flesh, spilling over my edges, suffocating me. I hurt. She’s pulling me apart. I can feel my zip creeping open down her back, she’s pulling me apart, I can feel it. The Satin sewn in panels down my front is straining, breaking. I know it’s going to rip soon, nothing can stand this sort of treatment long. Satin never was the most stoic of fabrics, not that you can blame her. Oh here it comes, the deep breath. I grab my stitches and hold tight, I feel an edge of thread slip it’s hole and another snap, the Satin shivers a tiny slip of a gasp before her edges fray, the zip creeps lower, retreating. Soft billows of flab overhang my giving edges, sweaty skin grips each escaping thread. A rest as she exhales on an impossibly loud note, and it’s over. Hands are pulling me off, smoothing poor Satin, exclaiming over our loose threads, the poor broken panel, berating zip for not standing the pressure. We hang, waiting. Each time, it’s never over until the fat lady sings.

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[Kaimee]: 5.Contest Entries.5 words

2006-02-02 kileaiya: That is brilliant!

It is so creative! It puts a spin on a very familiar term that would bring a smile to even the meanest of faces.

2006-02-02 Kaimee: Ugh, I don't like it much XD I'm starting to think everything I write is morbid! Meanwhile, I didn't know you hung around here! :P

2006-02-02 kileaiya: :P I'm sneaky like that.

2006-02-21 pixie_shimmer: remind me never to wear satin :D

I liked it though *^_^* I think it could have been better at some points. Like *you* have said you despise her twice - I think that those two lines needed to be punchier maybe ^_^ hmmmm :&

2006-02-22 Kaimee: I'm a piece of clothing, you expect me to have a large vocabulary too? ;)

2006-02-26 pixie_shimmer: mmm, no maybe not :p
The first one is fine. It is punchy, one sentence. 'I despise her'.

The next one is less so in my opinion - 'How I despise her'. It doesnt have the same impact, it doesnt end as strongly.