2011-08-13 Annie: I like it! I like anything helping someone step out of emo poetry! ;P I think you did great with a semi-political topic. It's kind of humorous and yet scary/serious at the same time. I was expecting a fairly steady flow after the first two lines rhymed but then you discard that; it provides an interesting feel. It kind of fits the topic of rioting and uproar. :)[AuroraLumos]: 733.Let it all burn
Rating: 0.35
So London, how do you do?
What sort of capital city are you?
On good days there's Royals and weddings and dreams,
But right now there's thugs all a-pillaging things.
Fire and break-ins, let the shops burn.
It's not London bridge this time.
LET IT ALL BURN.
These riots are pointless,
There is no cause,
The peaceful protest was all that there was,
Idiots found their excuse,
To steal and burn.
It's not London bridge this time.
LET IT ALL BURN.
Riots and fighting,
Spreading like fire,
To Bristol and Birmingham,
And all across England,
Yobs gang together,
They want things to burn,
It's not London bridge this time.
LET IT ALL BURN.
WN: I don't agree with the riots going on in London in any way shape or form, it's all idiots who've worked out that in enough numbers they can do these things.
Utter morons.
Anyway this poem isn't particularly brilliant, but I'm stepping way out of the depressive minorly self obsessed emo poetry phase I was in when I first started writing here hahaha. At least it's a start anyway :)
EDIT... don't quite know what happened there but the beginning of the poem got shmushed with the middle fixed now XD