[PhoenixV]: 638.Caged Man, Part One

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2007-04-25 14:30:26
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Caged Man: a short story series Part One

This guy is sitting, and wondering how he got there. He's on display for all to see. Bounded by a cage; one he cannot escape from. He goes about daily life as best as he knows how. Everyday people pass by and watch; looking at what he has to show. Each day he dreams about how he used to be, wishing to be once again. This guy is in a cage. Day in and day out he thinks, wishing nothing but a fantasy.

Nearing the edge of his world, he is pulled back towards the center, yet not quite. One day a beautiful woman starts talking to him. Each day he wonders why she does so.

'Why a caged man? I am of no use to her.' He thinks, 'someone's been praying for me I suppose.'


Others take notice, start calling him pathetic and unworthy, yet they know not that he hears.

Days go by, they become friends. He awaits each new day for he knows that he shall see her once more, except on weekends. That's when his exhibit is closed for cleaning and he is examined. On those days he thinks too much and becomes saddened. But he knows that Monday will come and she will come to see him again.

The man in the cage loves this woman. She helps him forget his past; yet the cage reminds him how he got there. He wishes she could set him free, but she has to find the key...


TO BE CONTINUED

2007-04-25 Eleanor: When I read this, I’m reminded of the book Slaughterhouse Five by Kurt Vonnegut, Jr. I recommend it. Anyway, you’ve set up an interesting scenario. I’m curious to see where you go with it.

On a more mundane, technical note, your text is riddled with spelling and punctuation errors, which make it difficult to appreciate the story since our eye is drawn to them. If you like, I can help you fix them if you are unsure of doing so yourself.

2007-04-25 Eleanor: Others take notice, start calling him pathetic and unworthy, yet hey know not that he hears. This is why you shouldn’t rely solely on a spell checker. It recognizes hey as a word, but you obviously meant to write they here. Otherwise, it’s much better. Nice.


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